-I know the brochure is supposed to be fun, but your font is hard to read. You should stick to Halvetica.
-In each of the freedoms, you say, "Freedom X is, The freedom to...". This would be more readable if it were said as, "Freedom X: The freedom to...".
-Alot is not a word. "A lot" is.
Free
software will never do this to
you, no legal battles for
copying the program, no
selling your rights, it's alot
like a friend giving you a
cake recipe so you can make it
and enjoy it with your family
latter.
This is a run on. Change it to:
Free
software will never do this to
you. There are no legal battles for
copying the program and no
selling your rights. It's a lot
like a friend giving you a
cake recipe so you can make it
and enjoy it with your family
later.
-Make sure you decide on what words to capitalize in the titles of the panels.
-Change the last paragraph in "Copyleft" to:
Today many major
companies use the GPL license,
including IBM
and Novell.
Some good free software:
●Joomla! : an content
management system.
●GNU/Linux : a free
operating system.
●OpenOffice.org : a complete
office suit.
Change to:
Some quality free software:
●Joomla! : a content
management system.
●GNU/Linux : a free
operating system.
●OpenOffice.org : a complete
office suite.
I like the analogy, but the only thing that sounds absurd in it is the fact that if you ask for the recipe, you get sued. It may be hard for people to relate to. Have you "hurd" (Hey, I'm not an rms at puns!!!) the one about the car? You "purchase" the car from the dealer, but the hood is locked shut and the tires are locked on. The dealer is the only one with the key. To make sure you didn't break the lock, you are required to check in with the dealer every 3 months. If you miss the appointment, your car will stop running. It is also against the law to give other people rides in your car. There is a camera in the car as well so the dealer can see if you give other people rides.
Wow, that would be hard to explain in a panel! Maybe you should stick to the cake.